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INYOURFACE:: Side Story 1

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READ RIGHT TO LEFT KTHXLAWL

Becauseeeee I want more practice making comic pages to a style I like and enjoy and doesn't take a mere 4 hours to screen tone each page. :|

Yeah- you won't know whats going on. but I'm gonna finish this story anyways lawlawl.
5-6 more pages to line :iconbawplz: But I'll do that after I've rested +D

Enjoy. I did rush on the speech bubbles e_e
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This is very neat looking! There are a few issues I see, though. I know you rushed on the speech bubbles, but you should still consider their placement and how it affects the way they flow. The first page—if you made that second box lower than the first bubble, then it would flow into the next panel a little smoother.

The following page has some major issues regarding what panel the bubbles bleed into. It's never a good idea to bleed over two panels at once unless there is no dialog (example: reaction two characters are having at once to something someone sais is a good moment to use double panel bleeds). I knew where to read next, but this isn't always the case.

in addition to the flow of the comic, keep in mind that you want to lead the reader's eyes both over speech bubbles and subject matters. 2nd page-2nd-3rd panel—the speech bubbles v. subject is too disjointed here. I would have thought of a better way to lay it out.

Also, I love your sketchy style sooo much that I think it would be so cool if you did another experimental page utilizing that talent you have.

Regardless of it's flaws, it's very well done! I would love to see you do another comic page some time again! Even if you aren't looking to doing this as a living ^_^